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Winds Affair With Fate by ~15stitches:icon15stitches:





“Winds Affair With Fate”



In your (eyes) I see yesterday.
Something passed
me |between| you
us those short days
and fewer nights and I believe
I gave part of myself to you.
If you look
6 feet |
down |
inside |
yourself \/
you will find a heartamongst the ashes
and blue air left of you.



The heart I so-called thawed.
I accomplished the impossible
when you fell in love with me.
So “beautiful” to you
and you, to me.
It was too perfect to be real;
too secure and leaving me complete, to be true.
Human nature bribes us to destroy.
If someone seems too good to be true
they probably are not
says I.
All
because
of
you.



The melted ice drips down
passing --through--> your body.
It runs a small river between us
and as my hazel (eyes) gaze down upon it
I feel the invisible knowledge
hinting that you're staring at me.
The water is as empty as depression
and sadder than the ocean,
as are your (eyes).
I kill the gaze shortly after creating it,
letting you watch me walk away
from you and your thawing heart,
away from emotional suicide.
Now I realize all you told me was true
even if I never wanted to believe it
and even if fate mutilated us this way.



I look for the best in people
and sometimes it brings out the worst in me,
killing me bittersweetly inside
as pink turns black.
The sour taste touches my tongue
and your embers are all that remain
from my Hell Fire that you created.
Flames - to cinders -
to embers - to ashes
I blow the charred remnants
of your beautiful body away
letting the wind take you
wherever she may.
Away
from
me
as
I
would
have
it.
©2002-2009 ~15stitches
:icon15stitches:

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Spontaneous.
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Rose

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:iconotter1:
this is loving yet dark... i'm a bit lost in it i think, though it's making me think vigorously. I like your form a lot and the words ring hollow in my mind. Great work.
:iconrepus:
WOW... !

i had to read it again & i was like... Jawdrop

this is great...
I look for the best in people
and sometimes it brings out the worst in me


good job... Clap




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:iconpisschrist:
The words are good.
The poem is great and leads me to your message.

I do not like all fo the symbols however.

But that is not behind the meaning of your poem so I try to overlook that.

Like Deviation.
:icondefourthson:
I'm alright depressed enough as it is, way to go, making it even worse! That's the last time I read your writings...

Yeah, prolly not.
:iconpsychomass:
Oooo thats wicked, you've got some pretty mad skillz
:iconpridian:
Excellent word selection, this poem is something that I felt I could relate to, and really carried a lot of meaning within the lines.

I too am not fond of the symbols, they would work better however if the poem included artwork. I like this because of the flow, and the choice of words, which is reflected particularly well by its length.

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